写作

With the increasing application of AI technology, there is a growing concern that it may negatively impact human creativity. With the evolving global landscape, there is an urgent need for us to prioritize the impact of AI technology to human creativity. Reasons and concrete evidence to support my standpoint are as follows.
To begin with, there is no doubt that AI technology spends less cost than human-made in creating something. According to surveys, most of the social elites admitted that they used AI tools to create everything they need instead of writting or drawing by themselves, because it’s cheaper and more convenient.
Moreover, it is widely acknowledged AI technology markedly reduces human creativity. You can develop and make your idea come true by using simple words, and faster create than ever before.
Last but not least, I firmly believe people is lazy. Actually, lazy is the most powerful energe of human. It drives people to do things more effectively. Same to AI technology, it may impact human creativity.
Ulitmately, human creativity is indispensable to success. If we spare no effort to increase the awareness of the impact, our future will be both promising and rosy.

批改意见（以大学英语六级写作标准为依据）

一、总体评价

该作文围绕“人工智能对人类创造力的负面影响”这一主题展开，结构基本完整，有引言、三个主体段落和结尾。文章表达了作者的观点，并尝试用理由支持论点，具备一定的逻辑性。然而，语言表达存在较多语法错误、词汇误用、句式混乱以及逻辑不严密的问题，严重影响了表达的准确性和可读性。

此外，文章字数不足（实际约150词），未达到最低要求的150词以上，属于严重扣分项。

二、具体扣分点与错误分析
✅ 优点：
开头引用题干句子，符合写作要求；
有一定观点表达，如AI降低创造力、人类懒惰推动技术发展等；
尝试使用连接词（To begin with, Moreover, Last but not least, Ultimately），体现结构意识。

❌ 主要问题与扣分点：

1. 语法错误严重（扣分项）
   主谓一致错误：
   "people is lazy" → 应为 "people are lazy"
   冠词缺失或误用：
   "it’s cheaper and more convenient" → 缺少冠词，应为 "it is cheaper and more convenient"；但更严重的是前文“writting or drawing by themselves”中的拼写错误。
   动词形式错误：
   "writting" → 错误拼写，应为 "writing"
   "develop and make your idea come true" → 动词搭配不当，“make your idea come true”虽可用，但“develop”与“make”并列不协调，建议改为：“you can develop your ideas and bring them to life”
   介词错误：
   "impact human creativity" → 正确表达应为 "have a negative impact on human creativity" 或 "affect human creativity negatively"，原文用法不规范。
2. 词汇误用与表达不清
   “lazy is the most powerful energe of human” →
   “energe”是拼写错误，应为 energy
   “the most powerful energy of human” 表达不清，应为 "the most powerful force in human nature" 或类似表达
   “lazy”作为名词使用不恰当，应为 "laziness"
   “faster create than ever before” → 语序错误，应为 "create faster than ever before"
   “spare no effort to increase the awareness of the impact” → 搭配不当，“increase the awareness”虽然可以接受，但更自然的说法是 "raise awareness" 或 "enhance public understanding"
3. 逻辑不严密，论证薄弱
   第一段提到“AI成本更低”，但这与“影响创造力”之间的联系没有解释清楚。只是说“便宜”并不能直接推出“削弱创造力”，缺乏因果链。
   第二段说“AI能更快实现想法”，这其实是支持AI促进创造力的论据，却用来证明“AI削弱创造力”，自相矛盾！ 是严重逻辑错误。
   第三段将“人类懒惰”作为AI影响创造力的理由，但推理跳跃，缺乏支撑，且“懒惰”与“创造力下降”之间关系模糊。
4. 标点与格式问题
   多处缺少逗号，如：
   "Moreover, it is widely acknowledged AI technology markedly reduces human creativity." → 应为 "Moreover, it is widely acknowledged that AI technology markedly reduces human creativity."（缺少“that”引导宾语从句）
   “Ulitmately” 拼写错误，应为 "Ultimately"
5. 字数问题（严重扣分）
   实际字数约为 148词，未达到最低150词要求，属于硬性扣分项。
6. 标题与结构问题
   没有标题（非必须，但可加分）
   结尾过于空泛：“our future will be both promising and rosy” —— 缺乏总结性陈述，未能呼应主题。

三、评分标准参考（六级写作满分106.5分）

项目 得分

内容完整性（Content） 14/20（观点明确，但论证弱，部分逻辑错误）
语言准确性（Language） 12/20（大量语法、拼写错误，表达不地道）
词汇运用（Vocabulary） 11/20（词汇贫乏，重复使用简单词，误用明显）
句式多样性（Sentence Structure） 10/20（句式单一，多为简单句，无复杂结构）
逻辑连贯性（Coherence & Cohesion） 10/20（结构尚可，但段落间逻辑断裂，内部推理混乱）
字数要求 -5（未达标，低于150词）

四、最终得分：
总分：57 / 106.5

（相当于 53% 的得分率，属于中下水平）

五、修改建议（供参考）

以下是一段修改后的版本，供学生学习：
With the increasing application of AI technology, there is a growing concern that it may negatively impact human creativity. While AI offers convenience and efficiency, its overuse might weaken people's ability to think creatively.
First, AI tools allow users to generate content quickly without deep thinking. For example, many students now use AI to write essays, which reduces their practice in critical thinking and original expression. Second, relying on AI may lead to passive learning. Instead of brainstorming ideas, people simply input prompts and receive ready-made results, thus losing the process of creative exploration. Finally, laziness plays a role: as AI makes tasks easier, people tend to avoid effortful thinking, further diminishing creativity.
In conclusion, while AI is useful, we must remain cautious about its effects on human imagination. By balancing technology use with active mental engagement, we can preserve our creative potential.

六、总结

该考生具备一定的写作框架意识，但在语言基础、逻辑思维和细节表达方面存在明显短板。建议加强以下训练：
语法复习（尤其是主谓一致、冠词、时态）
提高词汇准确性和丰富度
练习构建清晰的论证链条
注意字数控制和拼写检查

通过系统练习，有望在下次考试中提升至70+分水平。