The Best Way to Spread Chinese Culture

Nowadays, it is undeniable that Chinese culture has become one of the most popular topic in present-day world. Take my friend Ken as an example, who studies in Tsinghua university. He often remarks to me that he’s great interested in Chinese culture and asks the way to learn more.

It makes me realize the importance of showing and introducing the Chinese culture. In fact, we already did by some ways. For example, the movie called Ne Zha is very hot all around the world, it shows a myth from traditional Chinese culture. After that, a game that base on Chinese culture won awards from the best game awards. That’s Black Myth: Wukong, it has once again showed the power of Chinese culture.

In my opinion, the way of spreading Chinese culture shouldn’t be single. We ought to try our best to prove its value, promote its benefits and raise the awareness of spreading Chinese culture. That’s worthwhile.

评分分析与评价

1. 水平与评价

考生作文基本切题，围绕“传播中国文化的重要性”和“传播方式”展开，结构较为完整，思路清晰。文章通过举例（如电影《哪吒》和游戏《黑神话：悟空》）说明中国文化传播的成功案例，并在结尾提出综合传播方式的建议。整体语言表达较为连贯，但存在较多语法错误和中式英语表达，语言复杂度和高级词汇使用不足。

2. 扣分点

• 语法错误（扣8分）：

  • “one of the most popular topic” → 应为“topics”（单复数错误）。
  • “Tsinghua university” → 应为“Tsinghua University”（专有名词未大写）。
  • “he’s great interested” → 应为“greatly interested”（副词误用）。
  • “we already did by some ways” → 应为“we have already done so in some ways”（时态与介词错误）。
  • “a game that base on” → 应为“based on”（动词形式错误）。
  • “from the best game awards” → 应为“won awards at the best game awards”（介词搭配不当）。

• 语言表达问题（扣4分）：

  • “showing and introducing the Chinese culture” → 表达冗余，可简化为“promoting Chinese culture”。
  • “prove its value, promote its benefits” → 重复表达，逻辑不够紧凑。
  • “That’s worthwhile” → 语气过于口语化，可改为“It is a worthwhile endeavor”。
• 高级表达不足（扣3分）：
  文章缺乏复杂句型（如定语从句、状语从句）和高级词汇（如“disseminate,” “cultural heritage,” “multifaceted approach”等），整体语言较为基础。

3. 总评分：15分

根据评分标准，作文属于 10-15分档，即“基本切题，结构完整，但语言错误较多，表达不够精准”。

优化建议（如何达到满分）

1. 修正语法错误：

   • 确保单复数、时态、介词搭配等基础语法正确。
   • 例如：“one of the most popular topics in today’s world”。

2. 提升语言复杂度：

   • 使用定语从句、状语从句等复杂句型。
   • 例如：“The movie Ne Zha, which showcases a traditional Chinese myth, has gained global popularity.”

3. 丰富词汇与表达：

   • 替换重复或简单的词汇。
   • 例如：“promote its benefits” → “highlight its significance and universal appeal”。

4. 增强逻辑性与连贯性：

   • 使用过渡词（如“Firstly,” “Moreover,” “In conclusion”）使段落衔接更自然。

5. 优化结尾：

   • 提升总结句的深度。
   • 例如：“By employing a multifaceted strategy, we can not only preserve cultural heritage but also foster global cultural exchange.”

通过以上修改，作文可显著提升语言质量，达到 22-30分档。