My View on Eating in the Classroom

Nowadays, it is undeniable that almost everyone lives a rapid-paced life in modern society, especially for students. It causes a lot of problems. Take my friend Wang as an example, who ate his breakfast in the classroom for several times. He often remarks to me that he doesn’t want to do but he has to.

There are some points for account of my views. Firstly, as Wang says, this is a common situation. Most of students don’t have enough time for breakfast in the morning, they have to get up early so that they can arrive at the classroom on time. That’s why they eat in the classroom. I think that’s understandable. But if you’re just eating snacks in the classroom, especially those have strong taste, this is not great, because it will affect other people’s study.

All in all, everyone looks at it differently and the result is different. But for my part, eating breakfast in the classroom is understandable, snacking is obviously not so good. As young people, we should raise the awareness of eating in classrooms and do the right thing.

评价

• 作文切题，结构完整，思路清晰，文字通顺、连贯，语言比较地道，基本上无重大语言错误，仅有个别小错，如“the result is different”应为“the results are different”，“eating in classrooms”应为“eating in the classroom”。
• 作文有用一些高级表达和复杂句型，如“it is undeniable that”、“take...as an example”、“so that”等。

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• 存在一些小的语法错误，如“the result is different”、“eating in classrooms”，扣1分。

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