My Favourite Application

Nowadays, it is undeniable that what do you usually do with your phone has almost become the hottest topic in present-day world. Take my friend Wang as an example, who likes watching short videos. He often remarks to me that he thinks Tiktok is the greatest application of our time.

Wang is right, Tiktok is almost the most popular app in the world, especially after it was banned and forced to sell by the US government. But in my opinion, my favourite application must be Duolingo. It’s an application that allows everyone to learn languages online, even math and music. Best of all, you can use it for absolutely free. I once wanted to learn French after watching a French TV show, but unlike English, there aren’t many courses online. But eventually, I found it, and I learned some French.

Whether it’s Tiktok or Duolingo, the best app for you is what you like. Of course, I prefer Duolingo because it really helps me learn the language. By the way, its mascot is also popular among the young people.

作文评价：

这篇作文整体上切题，结构完整，思路清晰，文字较连贯，但存在一些语法错误和语言表达问题。文章能够基本完成题目要求，介绍了最喜欢的 APP（Duolingo）并陈述了理由，但在语言准确性和复杂句型的使用上有所欠缺。

扣分点：

1. 语法错误：

   • "what do you usually do with your phone" 应改为 "what you usually do with your phone"（缺少主语从句的引导词）。
   • "Tiktok is almost the most popular app" 中 "almost" 位置不当，应改为 "Tiktok is the most popular app almost in the world"。
   • "there aren’t many courses online" 中 "aren’t" 缩写形式不符合正式写作规范，应改为 "there are not many courses online"。
   • "By the way, its mascot is also popular among the young people" 中 "By the way" 使用不当，与上下文逻辑不连贯。

2. 拼写和标点错误：

   • "Tiktok" 应为 "TikTok"（品牌名称的大小写不规范）。
   • "math" 应为 "maths"（在英国英语中更常用，但需根据考试要求调整）。

3. 中式英语和表达不够准确：

   • "the best app for you is what you like" 表达过于简单，缺乏深度，可以改为更正式的表达。
   • "Best of all, you can use it for absolutely free" 中 "absolutely free" 表达冗余，可以简化为 "completely free"。

4. 缺乏高级表达和复杂句型：

   • 文章多使用简单句，缺乏复合句和高级词汇，例如可以使用更多从句和过渡词来增强文章的连贯性和复杂性。

5. 题目格式问题：

   • 题目 "My Favourite Application" 没有使用《》号或单独居中，需扣 1 分。

评分：

根据评分标准，这篇作文可以归入 16-21分 档次。具体扣分如下：

• 语法错误：扣 3 分
• 拼写和标点错误：扣 1 分
• 中式英语和表达不够准确：扣 2 分
• 缺乏高级表达和复杂句型：扣 2 分
• 题目格式问题：扣 1 分

总分：16 分

优化建议：

1. 修正语法错误：

   • 将 "what do you usually do with your phone" 改为 "what you usually do with your phone"。
   • 将 "Tiktok is almost the most popular app" 改为 "TikTok is the most popular app almost in the world"。
   • 将 "there aren’t many courses online" 改为 "there are not many courses online"。

2. 改进表达和用词：

   • 将 "the best app for you is what you like" 改为 "the best app for you depends on your personal preferences"。
   • 将 "Best of all, you can use it for absolutely free" 改为 "Best of all, it is completely free to use"。

3. 增加高级表达和复杂句型：

   • 使用更多复合句，例如："Duolingo stands out among numerous language-learning apps because it combines educational content with gamification, making the learning process both enjoyable and effective."
   • 使用过渡词增强连贯性，例如："Furthermore," "In addition," "Moreover," 等。

4. 注意题目格式：

   • 将题目 "My Favourite Application" 用《》号标出或单独居中。

5. 整体结构优化：

   • 增加引言段的背景介绍，使文章开头更具吸引力。
   • 在结论段总结全文，强调 Duolingo 的优势。

通过以上修改，文章可以达到 22-30分 档次，甚至接近满分。