Never Put off until Tomorrow What You Can Do Today

Nowadays, it is undeniable that dreams and goals have almost become the most popular topic in present-day world. Almost everyone has own dreams. Take my friend Wang as an example, who wants to study at MIT. He often remarks to me that he will do better tomorrow.

However, to my opinion, the more important thing is what do you do today? No matter what you do for your dream today, even just practiced it once, it will make today worthful. If you just plan to do something tomorrow, your dreams will not come true. For example, I just practiced my math every day by finishing a test, I got A plus grade in the end.

So, let us do it now. We ought to make our dreams come true step by step, never wait for tomorrow. Eventually, you will be the person you want to be. Good luck to you!

评分与评价：

得分：18分（16-21分档次）

评价：

1. 切题性：作文基本切题，围绕“不要拖延，今天能做的事不要等到明天”展开，但例子和论述的深度稍显不足。
2. 结构完整性：结构较为完整，开头点题，中间举例说明，结尾总结，但逻辑衔接稍显生硬。

3. 语言表达：

   • 有一些语法错误，例如：

     • “Almost everyone has own dreams” → 应为“Almost everyone has their own dreams”。
     • “to my opinion” → 应为“in my opinion”。
     • “it will make today worthful” → 应为“it will make today worthwhile”。
     • “I just practiced my math every day by finishing a test” → 应为“I practiced math every day by finishing tests”。
   • 语言表达较为简单，缺乏高级句型和复杂结构。
4. 连贯性：整体连贯性尚可，但部分句子之间的逻辑关系不够清晰，例如“However, to my opinion”与前文的衔接稍显突兀。

扣分点：

1. 语法错误：多处语法错误，包括介词使用不当、名词单复数错误、时态不一致等。
2. 语言表达不够地道：部分表达显得生硬，例如“practiced it once”“worthful”等。
3. 缺乏高级表达和复杂句型：文章以简单句为主，缺乏复合句和高级词汇。
4. 没有题目：作文没有明确的题目，需扣1分。

优化建议：

1. 增加题目：为作文添加一个明确的题目，例如“Never Procrastinate: Act Today for Tomorrow’s Success”。

2. 修正语法错误：

   • “has own dreams” → “has their own dreams”。
   • “to my opinion” → “in my opinion”。
   • “worthful” → “worthwhile”。
   • “I just practiced my math every day by finishing a test” → “I practiced math every day by completing tests”。

3. 丰富语言表达：

   • 使用更多高级词汇和复杂句型，例如：

     • “Procrastination is the thief of time”（引用名言）。
     • “By taking consistent action, we can gradually turn our dreams into reality”（复杂句型）。

4. 增强逻辑性：

   • 在段落之间增加过渡句，使文章逻辑更清晰。例如：

     • “However, while many people talk about their dreams, few take immediate action to achieve them.”

5. 增加例子的深度：

   • 除了提到朋友和自己的例子，可以加入更具体的细节或引用名人故事，例如：

     • “Albert Einstein once said, ‘The difference between successful people and unsuccessful people is that successful people do what unsuccessful people don’t like to do today.’”

修改后的满分作文示例：

Never Procrastinate: Act Today for Tomorrow’s Success

Nowadays, it is undeniable that dreams and goals have become one of the most popular topics in the modern world. Almost everyone has their own dreams. Take my friend Wang as an example. He dreams of studying at MIT, but he often tells me, “I’ll start working hard tomorrow.”

However, in my opinion, the key lies in what we do today. No matter how small the action, taking a step today makes it worthwhile. If we keep postponing our tasks until tomorrow, our dreams will never come true. For instance, I practiced math every day by completing tests, and as a result, I achieved an A+ grade. Similarly, historical figures like Thomas Edison did not wait for inspiration but worked diligently every day to invent the light bulb.

So, let us act now. We ought to make our dreams come true step by step, rather than waiting for an elusive tomorrow. By taking consistent action, we can gradually turn our aspirations into reality. Eventually, you will become the person you aspire to be. Good luck on your journey!